Tales Of Zack *EDITED* 15/4/08 *Testplay release*

[SanjiUrimata]

Your mapping is off.
Don't copy+paste houses from a tileset, it looks strange.
Am I the only one to mention this?
Oh...I'm not.

 

[Colonist540]

@murata. okay i got it.

@doc spoc. THANKS MAN!!

 

[Colonist540]

Well , first , better mapping. Just , make sure everything looks RIGHT before you go onto the next map , y'know?

Secondly Eventing. See the little child in your house? He turns into a pigion if you talk from the top , so maby just use DIRECTION FIX.

Thirdly Grammar. Just try to spell everything right , and use the preveiw thingy. Grammar is the thing between a child's game , and a pro's game.

Lastly , Try to hint your players which way is to go. You can be stumbling around there for like , an hour , and never know what to do.

So , yeah , if you need help in Grammar , send me the RPGMXP Project File , and I'll correct it.

P.S Also , the intro , you really need something better than just waking up in the basement.

It has potential , you just don't really have the skills. I suggest you get a bigger development team on this , so you could fix all the above problems.

~Doc Spoc~

Doc spoc send me a private message and this what he say.

 

[Colonist540]

Reupload.

 

[dadevvtsvre]

I can't play it.
When I try to, it says "Failed to load script data"

 

[moog]

THE NEW TESTPLAY HAVE RELEASE!!
61MB
The new testplay[/size]

61 MEGABYTES?!?!?

Yeah I dont think so

 

[Noliander]

61 megabytes? He must be hiding the good game somewhere in there.

 

[Colonist540]

I re upload it.

 

[Zwark0]

Hey, want me to make a better userbar for you? Like the one in my sig?

I've  just been obsessed with making userbars lately....so shiny...

 

[Dalton]

zwark, that was totally off topic...

What was bothering me about your demo, was the characters and the atmosphere...
Why does the quiet village music carry on, even if we face Ark?
Why do random people we never met before agree to join us in our epic and dangerous quest in a split second?
Why does Zack has a different hair colour after some years?

Th dialouge was terrible. I mean:
"What happens to us now?"
"Well, we die."
*die*

Honestly, who talks like that? No atmosphere whatsoever...

You should truley work on that...

 

[Zwark0]

Yeah, sorry about that....
I was just going through one of those userbar making phases

God damn, I can't find anything to comment on that hasn't already been said.....
You really shouldn't post a game until you've finished making the characters. I made that same mistake and I'm redoing my post now. Also, try putting up something graphic that people can associate with the characters. The biggest turn-off for me when it comes to reading character bios is looking at a tiny, un-interesting blob of black text. Post up part of the charaset or something.

And another thing, put up a bit more info on your characters. What are their personalities, what do they look like, where do they come from ect. Give me a reason to play as these people.

my head hurts.

good luck with your project!

 

[Shadowstory3]

this game really is gay, luckily my name is Zack so I need to make this game epic, so recruit me if you want to...

 

[Kishi3133]

Too much of a Final Fantasy , Zack is from Crisis Core and Cloud Strife is also in Crisis Core!

 

[Despain]

Colonist540, it's very apparent that this quality of game isn't the kind of thing that we expect from out members. It's very obviously your first game, and more of an experiment with the program than anything serious (I hope). I don't really know what to say other than I don't think that this type of project is really appropriate for these forums. You need to spend some more time learning the program, and general aspects of game design. I'd suggest you take a break and read up on some things, and start over.

Also, forgive me if I missed this, but what is your native language? I would seriously suggest that you make a game in your own language, rather than trying to use English, which you do not have a very good grasp of.