Rebirth
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Thanks! I'm trying my best to keep the game good and original :smile:sakabilli":2m3cflao said:
The only reason some characters have last names because their family is part of the story.Fayte":2m3cflao said:
Ravye, F'arthas and Elitiza's families are not very important within the Sam Hatake Plot.
What does that comment mean?The Great Terror":2m3cflao said:
The only reason some characters have last names because their family is part of the story.Fayte":1uqubf0j said:
Ravye, F'arthas and Elitiza's families are not very important within the Sam Hatake Plot.[/quote]
Alright that's understandable but one MAJOR flaw that you have with your characters name is that I have no idea how I'm supposed to pronounce them. Especially "F'arthas" (is that like fathers?) and Ravye (is that like Rav-Yee?) You should probably try and think of name that are pronounceable instead of cool looking (even though they don't look cool either, just hard to pronounce :/ )
Fayte":3j8ztuf3 said:
Alright that's understandable but one MAJOR flaw that you have with your characters name is that I have no idea how I'm supposed to pronounce them. Especially "F'arthas" (is that like fathers?) and Ravye (is that like Rav-Yee?) You should probably try and think of name that are pronounceable instead of cool looking (even though they don't look cool either, just hard to pronounce :/ )
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If you want, Ill put up punctuation, I don't mind.
F'arthas is just pronounced Far-this
Ravye is Rave-Yee (You were close)
Thanks for telling me that. I'll put it up the punctuation quickly
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IMO dude this is a concept thread I don't see why you're bumping. You've received a good deal of criticism and advice on your game, why not go off and work on it and come back and bump it with updates? Why are people gonna write anything more if it's not had anything updated?
About the game, it looks like it's finding it's legs but I think you should seriously consider the names. Why would someone born into royalty have an English first name and Japanese second? It's understandable if he's changed his name to Sam to avoid attention but the Hatake would attract attention anyways. Also it's not Huh-take it's Ha-take. Learn, at least to pronounce the Japanese properly if you're gonna use it.
Also why would someone who was once royalty ever become a peasant? And how would one teenage girl be able to fend off a group of trained and knighted, knights? Not really believable.
About the game, it looks like it's finding it's legs but I think you should seriously consider the names. Why would someone born into royalty have an English first name and Japanese second? It's understandable if he's changed his name to Sam to avoid attention but the Hatake would attract attention anyways. Also it's not Huh-take it's Ha-take. Learn, at least to pronounce the Japanese properly if you're gonna use it.
Also why would someone who was once royalty ever become a peasant? And how would one teenage girl be able to fend off a group of trained and knighted, knights? Not really believable.
What does the title have anything related to the story... really?
Most of the amatuer RPG titles ussually takes on a name that has nothing related to the story, only that it sounds "cool". I hate that =/ Sorry. If you know what Rebirth means, it really doesnt have anything related. Try using ownmade names such as Talta or something or something related to the story.
Most of the amatuer RPG titles ussually takes on a name that has nothing related to the story, only that it sounds "cool". I hate that =/ Sorry. If you know what Rebirth means, it really doesnt have anything related. Try using ownmade names such as Talta or something or something related to the story.
Totti":rjlfmkyk said:
It has the name Rebirth because the main character retakes his life that he was originally living in all because of a severe thing that happened to him.Avgen":rjlfmkyk said:
EDIT & FINAL POST:
The Game has been shutdown and will never come back up in these forums again.
The Book well be much better than the screwed up plot here, and every single idea that was given advice here well be pondered if it well be used or not. I'm sorry if this is necroposting but this topic has been dead for a long time and will never be active AGAIN.