Looks a lot cleaner, though I'm not completely sold on your font choice. I think a serif font like Bookman or TimesNewRoman would suit the overall feel of the image and work with the romannumerals on the clock face, or at least a less modern looking font.
BTW: If you don't have too many decorative fonts at your disposal, you might want to check out
Blambot's free fonts for something you like. "Thirteen O'Clock" is a nice one as is "Detectives Inc" and either might work with what you're aiming for.