Ana-Core

[Dark_Cover]

thanks, as you may or may not see, im serious about this game and i cant stand for anything less the perfect. Im not just talking about the mapping and the scripts i add to the game, I want an Amazing story that keeps the player interested. That why i need to know what people think. I apreciate all critisism and i love making edits tot he story. =)

Yes well, having that said, You might see some things in my first post that were said by someone that i havent changed yet, that is because Im doing it all on microsoft word makeing it nice and grammaticly(Whoa, spell-check) correct before posting. Im almost done, just a few house chores and what not and ill be back to typing and makeing edits. You should see an update to the first post by the end of te day.

-Update-
Check top. I just put a snipet of the story in a "commercialy revised" format. I guess my enlgish teacher teaching me how to use commercial/sellsman format came in handy, or did it? You tell me.

ugh, so many "one more thing".
I can't find the file i saved by character Bios on and ive been searching for about 45 minutes so i think for the sake of saving time, I will just remake them...that means they most likly won't be up today.

OMG one more thing. Im one of the nerds who doesn't mind doing his share of physical laber but As soon as i got into Vishal's Bio(personaly my favorite character, that you know of)I have to leave to go clean my aunts Pool...WOW so now the Bio's definatly won't be up till tommorrow.

Ok never mind. We stayed home and i got to work on the Bios. I only posted two of them as a simple "preveiw" biography. I dont know if i should add to the biographies or if they are good how they are. If you have any way to change the Biographies so that you learn more about the characters then by all means tell me.

 

[Dark_Cover]

Im a creative guy but i need more then just my opinion. Im almost done writing my story, all that is left is for more criticism and then ill be finished, THEN starts the actual Game development...Well im forgetting one key step, Creative ideas...so no i want to know what features You think are cool, fun, and boring.

-Im thinking about WoW and the first thing that comes to mind is the part where you must lvl up and go to a tutor to learn skill. At say lvl 10 you pay 50G to learn Flame arrow. Would this be good to add to my game?

-Fishing, Mining, smithing...This is a real world and sure killing monsters gets you money but remember that i said you wont actualy kill monsters to later on in the game. At first its just animals and poor beasts with nothing to pick off of there dead bodies...Fishing, mining, and smithing are basic things in a world, so my question is, how can i make them more "fun"

-For mages i plan for the character to find secret scrolls that unlock great abilities. let me explain. you find a scroll called "ice scroll A"
This doesnt do much but take up space. You need the other parts to the scroll like part B and C of the scroll. After finding the scrolls you character, while holding part A can use the skill ice. Of course if your a mage you can just learn "ice" normaly but for fighters and archers, scrolls are they gait way to magic.

I have more ideas but i have to go eat...So please...Tell me what YOU think, and by all means, submit a cool idea.

 

[MukanshinBlack]

I've been too busy in real life to leave any really good comments, but if you talk to me on an instant messenger I'll help you out.  My strong points are story writing and eventing.  Look at my public profile to uhh see my IM usernames and hit me up.